Writing Concise Sentences
|Many uneducated citizens
|3 am in the morning||3 am|
|a person who is honest||an honest person|
|a total of 14 birds||14 birds|
|biography of her life||biography|
|consensus of opinion||consensus|
|each and every||each|
|exactly the same||the same|
|frank and honest exchange||frank exchange or honest exchange|
|he/she is a person who . . .||he/she|
|in spite of the fact that||although|
|in the field of economics/law
|in economics/law enforcement|
|in the event that||if|
|job functions||job or functions|
|one and the same||the same|
|period of four days||four days|
|personally, I think/feel||I think/feel|
|puzzling in nature||puzzling|
|shorter/longer in length||shorter/longer|
|small/large in size||small/large|
|square/round/rectangular in shape||square/round/rectangular|
|surrounded on all sides||surrounded|
|the future to come||the future|
|there is no doubt but that||no doubt|
|we are in receipt of||we have received|
由於在日益科技化的世界，我們越來越仰賴縮寫 (abbreviations)和頭字語 (acronyms)，一種特殊的冗贅正在我們現代世界中擴散蔓延。"ATM machine" 是冗贅的說法，因為 ATM 就是 Automated Teller Machine (自動提款機) 的縮寫。同理，"HIV virus" 和 " AIDS syndrome" 亦是冗贅的說法，因為 HIV 意謂 Human Immunodeficiency Virus (人類免疫不足病毒__愛滋病毒)，而 AIDS 意謂 Acquired ImmunoDeficiency Syndrome (後天免疫不足症候群__愛滋病)；"CPU unit" 亦然，因為 CPU 意謂 Central Processing Unit (中央處理器)。當我們以 "CPU units" 來表示複數時，這聽起來特別可笑，因為這不就變成了 Central Processing Unit units。所以，當我們在演說 (尤其是在正式寫作中) 使用縮寫或頭字語時，最好事先弄懂各個字母的意思，以免製造新的冗贅。
|all things considered||All things considered, Connecticut's woodlands are in better shape
now than ever before.
|as a matter of fact||As a matter of fact, there are more woodlands in Connecticut now
than there were in 1898.
|as far as I'm concerned||As far as I'm concerned, there is no need for further protection of
|at the present time||This is because there are fewer farmers at the present time.
This is because there are fewer farmers now.
|because of the fact that||Woodlands have grown in area because of the fact that farmers have
abandoned their fields.
Woodlands have grown in area because farmers have abandoned their fields.
|by means of||Major forest areas are coming back by means of natural processes.
Major forest areas are coming back through natural processes. (or naturally)
|by virtue of the fact that||Our woodlands are coming back by virtue of the fact that our economy
has shifted its emphasis.
Our woodlands are coming back
|due to the fact that||Due to the fact that their habitats are being restored, forest
creatures are also re-establishing their population bases.
|exists||The fear that exists among many people that we are losing our
woodlands is uncalled for.
|for all intents and purposes||The era in which we must aggressively defend our woodlands has, for
all intents and purposes, passed.
The era in which we must aggressively defend our woodlands has
|for the most part||For the most part, people's suspicions are based on a
misunderstanding of the facts.
|for the purpose of||Many woodlands, in fact, have been purchased for the purpose of
creating public parks.
Many woodlands, in fact, have been purchased
|have a tendency to||This policy has a tendency to isolate some
|in a manner of speaking||The policy has, in a manner of speaking, begun to Balkanize the more rural
parts of our state.
The policy has
|in a very real sense||In a very real sense, this policy works to the detriment of those it
is supposed to help.
|in my opinion||In my opinion, this wasteful policy ought to be revoked.
|in the case of||In the case of this particular policy, citizens of northeast
Connecticut became very upset.
Citizens of northeast Connecticut became very upset about his policy.
|in the final analysis||In the final analysis, the state would have been better off without
such a policy.
|in the event that||In the event that enough people protest, it will probably be
If enough people protest, it will probably be revoked.
|in the nature of||Something in the nature of a repeal may soon take place.
|in the process of||Legislators are already in the process of reviewing the statutes.
Legislators are already
|it seems that||It seems that they can't wait to get rid of this one.
|manner||They have monitored the activities of conservationists in a cautious
They have cautiously monitored the activities of conservationists.
|the point I am trying to make||The point I am trying to make is that sometimes public policy
doesn't accomplish what it set out to achieve.
|type of||Legislators need to be more careful of the type of policy they
Legislators need to be more careful of the
|what I mean to say is||What I mean to say is that well intentioned lawmakers sometimes make
fools of themselves.
|不必要時，避免使用 really, very, quite, extremely, severely 等字。我們只要說 "the salary increase is inadequate." 就夠了。如果說 "it is severely inadequate." 可能給人一種歇斯底里的感覺。這些字眼不應從你的字彙中刪除，但少用時反而可達到最佳的效果。|
|避免虛字 (假主詞) 結構|
|這聽起來好像是政治人物必須學習來避免的事物，非也！以 there is/are 或 it is 做開頭的虛字結構 (expletive construction) 往往使句子的能量喪失，軟趴趴地無力表現句子的中心意旨。|
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